Writing > Improving Sentences
Part or all of the following sentence is underlined; beneath the sentence are five ways of phrasing the underlined material. Select the option that produces the best sentence. If you think the original phrasing produces a better sentence than any of the alternatives, select choice A.
They determine the color and flavor of honey by the flowers from which the nectar is taken.
(A) They determine the color and flavor of honey by the
(B) Honey’s color and flavor is determined by which
(C) Honey’s color and flavor determined by those
(D) The color of honey, and its flavor, determined by the
(E) The color and flavor of honey are determined by the
The Correct answer is E.
Explanation
Choice (E) is correct. It avoids the error of the original by removing the unnecessary pronoun “They,” and by using a well-constructed phrase, “The color and flavor … are …
