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冲击波英语专四系列:作文之范文赏析——大学生当村官

2012-12-11 09:37
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题目:College Graduates Work as Village Officials

写作要求

Nowadays, while many college graduates fi ght fi ercely for a position in big cities, some of  them choose to leave big cities for the countryside and work as village offi cials. What in your  mind are the possible benefi ts of this choice? 

Write on Answer Sheet Two a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

College Graduates Work as Village Officials

You are to write in three parts.

In the fi rst part, state specifi cally what your idea is.

In the second part, provide reasons to support your opinion OR describe your idea.

In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

审题思路

本题是一道分析利弊/差异型的题目,说明大学生毕业后去当村官有什么好处 ,可以按以下思路展开 :

先对这种现象表示肯定,是一个必然的趋势,然后列举大学生为乡村带去的好处(新概念 、新技术等 )以及大学生从这种工作中得到的收获(更广阔的发展空间、人生价值的实现等 )。

范文赏析

College Graduates Work as Village Officials

Today the issue how college graduates should choose their careers has aroused public concern. Some time ago, it was reported that some college graduates chose to work as village officials. To this people’s attitudes differ sharply. Some hold the positive view while others are against it. As far as I am concerned, I believe that it is a wise choice.

引言部分:作者提出这样一个现象:有些大学生毕业后选择当村官,对此人们看法不一,并直接说明自己的观点:这是明智的选择。

On the one hand, college graduates can contribute a lot to the development of the countryside. Firstly they can apply their professional knowledge there. Secondly, they can introduce new concepts to the countryside and speed the development of rural culture. As a result, the gap  between the city and the countryside can well be bridged.

On the other hand, these graduates can benefit a lot from working as village officials. While too many college graduates are fi ghting fora handful of positions in big cities, these graduates can find themselves a wider stage of development and realize their value.

主体部分:这部分分两段从两个方面分析。先说明大学生对乡村的发展有贡献(采用总分总的结构),然后说明大学生当村官也能为自己找到更广阔的发展平台(采用对比的手法 )。不同的手法使文章富有变化,不单一。

Therefore, collegegraduates working as village officials is a win-win choice and more graduates should be encouraged to work in the countryside.

总结部分:作者用 therefore自然地带出结论:这是个双赢的选 ,应受到鼓励。这与首段观点呼应。

亮点回放

1. arouse public concern: “引起公众 的关注” ;此句也可以写成People are concerned about how college graduates should choose their careers. 不过本文的写法更为正式些 ,另外public也可以用popular替换 。

2. differ sharply : “有很大/ 明显 的区别 ” ;此句 同学们通常写成 :different  people may have/hold different attitudes/opinion about this相 比之下 ,本文的写法更简洁正式些 。

3. wise: “智慧的、明智 的” ,常见搭配为a wise choice。

4. contribute a lot to: “非常有助于……/对 ……有很大帮助”;近义词可以用help a lot或者be a great help to。

5. apply: 此处表示 “应用、使用” ,比简单地使用use更能体现出作者对词汇的灵活把握 。

6. introduce: 常用作介绍 ,此处表示引进新 的概念 。

7. gap:  “裂缝 、缺 口、差距”;常用于  “代沟、城乡差距 、贫富差距  (generation gap ,the gap between the city and the countryside ,the gap between the poor and the rich )”等词组中。

8. bridge: 常用作名词 ,此处作动词用 ,表示  “缩短……之间的差距” ,非常形象生动。

9. fight for: “为……奋斗、争斗” ,此处近义词为compete for 。

10. a handful of: “少量的” ;比简单地使用a few要来得形象生动。

11. win-win: “双赢的” ,常用的搭配为a win-win situation/choice。

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