15天搞定雅思写作 Task 1 -Day 9 IELTS Graphs- A common mistake

【跟着沪江走，高分在招手】·【雅思备考·写作篇】

雅思写作中，大家不注意时经常会犯各种小错误，今天我们就来看一下有哪些小错误我们可以避免呢？

仔细看下面的图表以及他们的标题，图标的下方是描述图表的句子。

找找看，这些句子有哪些错误？

From 1975 to 2000, hamburgers increased dramatically from 10 to 100 times per year. At the same time, fish and chips fell significantly to just under 40.

While buses fell from just over 25% to around 16% in 2000, cars increased dramatically to over 35%. Meanwhile, bikes fell over this time frame.

大家有没有发现这两句话错误的地方？

在第一句中，hamburgers是不能主动增加的，fish and chips也是不能主动减少的。第二句也是同样的道理，car不能主动增加， a bus and a bike也是不能主动减少的。

那么我们应该怎样描述呢？当然是在前面加上consumption（消费）啦，hamburgers or fish and chips的销量可以上升或下降。同样的，第二句我们可以在buses,car,bike前面加上use（使用），这样句子就说得通了。

想要写出正确的句子有很多方法，其中最重要的就是检查句子的主语是否正确。

From 1975 to 2000, the consumption of hamburgers increased dramatically from 10 to 100 times per year. At the same time, the number of times that fish and chips were eaten fell significantly to just under 40.

While bus usage fell from just over 25% to around 16% in 2000, cars as a mode of travel increased dramatically to over 35%. Meanwhile, the use of bikes fell over this time frame.

Check your subject

写作之前，我们应该先对图表进行总结，然后找出句子的主语，即我们需要比较什么。

在雅思图表写作中，最常见的错误是主语错误。

第一张图是有关快餐消费的；

第二张图是有关四种交通工具的使用。

如果这两点理解错误，写作中就会出错。

Practice

下面的几句话是从雅思图表写作中抽出的主语错误的典型例子，后面的括号中是却少的主语。

大家看一看，结合今天的内容，能不能用多种方法把这些句子改正确。

1. Cinema's increased from 2000 to 2005. (attendance)

2. Saudi Arabia fell significantly to 270 million barrels a year. (oil production).

3. 2000 to 2010 saw DVDs drop from 70% to 60%. (purchased).