同学你好，该知识点来自沪江网校《2023年11月CATTI笔译二级【韩刚签约班】》的课程，想要更系统的学习，欢迎进入课程学习。不仅可以和更多的同学一起学习，而且还有老师、助教随时的学习指导和知识点解答哦。

同学你好~
同学已经进步很大了哦~不要妄自菲薄哦~
第一段：一些词汇的翻译很棒哦~，如 “loathe”（讨厌）、“various”（形形色色的）、“afflictions”（苦难）、“innate right”（天经地义）、“supreme and paramount virtue”（至高至圣的美德）、“checkered”（叱咤风云的）。
不过“while their checkered war career as abnormal ones” 中缺少谓语动词，应改为 “while regarding their checkered war career as abnormal ones”。
2.“regarding wasting as our enjoyment” 中 “wasting” 不太准确，可以改为 “consumption”。
“What I do want to point out is that all of these just belong to consumption but extravagant consumption couldn’t be the only condition to enjoy our life.” 中 “couldn’t” 改为 “can't”；“the only condition to enjoy our life” 可以改为 “a necessary condition for enjoying life”，表达更地道。
希望对同学有帮助~