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写的很好哦，有几处需要调整修改一下：
1. employers prefer to promote those who have quality of performance.
2. and before colleagues, which would have positive influence to others, thus your will more easily to get promotion.--调整为：which would have positive influence to other colleagues，thus it will be more easily to get promotion.
3. and be a model to other colleagues.

祝学习进步~