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《奎文旧事》利用夜色中奎文塔，采用360度裸眼3D秀的形式，以奎文塔为主角，展现四百多年变化历程。3D秀分为三个篇章。
第一篇章——龙潭塔史：明代万历年间的信江之畔，河浒岩壁之上，曾镌刻隶书“龙潭”二字，潭中有蛟龙作祟，兴发大水，民不聊生，为镇守蛟龙，建塔于潭边，塔名‘见龙’... ...”故别名“见龙塔”。自此上饶风调雨顺，百姓安居乐业。
Referring to the Kuiwen pagoda at night in Old Stories of Kuiwen,the writer（这里可以直接用节目的名字做主语，没必要说作者，因为很有可能就没有作者） makes use of form of （把of form删掉）360 angles 3D display（直接用show就可以了） without glasses, and he （把he删掉，就用节目的名字做主语，因为你根本不知道有没有作者，作者有几个）set Kuiwen pagoda as the main character to illustrate the changing course during 400 years. The 3D display consists of 3 chapters.
The first chapter-（注意英文标点使用规范，英文中的破折号不长这样）The history （节目片名要首字母大写）of Dragon Pond pagoda:  （注意英文写作规范，这里需要删掉冒号，另起一行）In WanLi era of （in）Ming Dynasty, located around the side of Xin River, it （it指谁？语法错误）was engraved with Dragon Pond in Lishu(an ancient style of calligraphy current （current？）in the Han Dynasty 206B.C-A.D.200为什么要加这段解释呢？隶书的可以是official script即使用lishu也可以用脚注，定语从句等方式解释~）, and there was a flood dragons （到底是一个还是两个？a和复数不能共存）that kept haunting common people and the dragon invoked the deluge which inflict （过去时态！）common people（太长了，缩减一下）. This pagoda was established （用built比较好）to control the flood dragon and where（where引导的什么句子？）upon was （was的主语是谁？）named as Jianlong, and （and改成so）this pagoda was also named as pagoda of Jianlong. Ever since that （删掉that）Shaorao city had favourable climatic weathers（什么意思？看不懂....） and （since后面的主句呢？）its common people has been living a prosperous and contented life.
同学的译文有比较严重的语法问题，一个句子没有主语或者没有主句或者找不到主语动词的情况很多，这是非常不好的错误，最好改一下
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